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-I am so sorry for nothing- by ~alicatylon:iconalicatylon:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Experimental > Typographical


Hello, my darling!!    
         ( Cheating bastard! )
I couldn't wait to see you!                       
         ( It's the last time )
I've been waiting for so long.                     
         ( For the right moment )
You look dashing in white.                         
         ( But crimson suits you better )  
Let's step out onto the terrace.                   
         ( Your scream won't be heard there... )
I can't belive you can afford this.                
         ( Too bad you can't buy forgiveness. )
I know I'm you one and only.                       
         ( What did she have that I didn't? )
The moonlight is beautiful                        
         ( It brings out your deceit. )
Come close my love                                
         ( Just a little to the left. )
Oh, that's nothing.                              
         ( It's only my gun. )
I'll see you again, my darling                 
         ( In hell, that is. )

                    
I am so sorry for nothing
©2003-2009 ~alicatylon
:iconalicatylon:

Author's Comments

more font fun! the italics indicate the characters thoughts that the aldy is having.. yeah.. dunno if this came out well, but you guys are the judges.

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~kxt-schubaltz Jun 27, 2003, 9:56:00 PM
Dark. Very dark. I like.
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~seekingtruth Jun 28, 2003, 12:20:44 AM
Shweet! As you know, I'm quite fond of parentheses myself... ain't it spiffy how they are read as thoughts?

I like the darkness, too... I love dark poetry. Let's see some more soon, ne?

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~dcmbrnite Jun 28, 2003, 6:12:09 AM
very devious, my friend, I like this indeed. :) (Smile) I haD it all pictured in my head...thinking "the little @#!@$" ...vengence at its best, I like how you described the scenes play by play with out getting all wordy. Nice job :) (Smile)

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The night has a thousand eyes, And the day but one; Yet the light of the bright world dies, With the dying sun. The mind has a thousand eyes, And the heart but one; Yet the light of a whole life dies, When love is done.
~ by Francis W. Bourdillo
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~zeda Jun 29, 2003, 4:23:05 PM
^_^" VERY cool! I like the flow and the wording, as well as the visual placement of the lines. It makes for quite a lovely poem! You made a typo with 'you' instead of 'your' in the line 'I know I'm you one and only,', but that's the only tiny mistake in this whole lovely thing~!

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-Zeda

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`wernstrum Jun 30, 2003, 1:39:06 AM
i couldave sworn i commented on this poem b4, no seriously. i dont even have to re read it. Gotta love the hint of paranoia in this piece. and gr8 2 c u put it into the experiemental section. it pisses me off 2 c ppl putting their poetry in sections where it isn't suited (yes im wierd). Anyways, gr8 piece, especially if i have coincidentally come to it twice! :) (Smile)

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Waste not want not
-- The Mask
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~tacos4dragons Jun 30, 2003, 9:36:00 AM
oh wow! thats all I got to say

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errr..Hi!

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~leftomaniac Jun 30, 2003, 11:50:19 AM
Fantastic! I like the way her words and her thoughts merge, but would also make sense on their own. It fits the interaction of real words/thoughts well.

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"God keeps stealing my friends." -Ken
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~elationandco Jul 2, 2003, 1:16:35 AM
This is great. I laughed my a@@ off to this. Though i dont think dateing you is the best idea. hehe anywhey i like how you did this i could really hear a voice through this and it flowed well.

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Then again everything in this book could be wrong.
-"Illusions"
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